Oh wow, that's a great, witty story, and a very interesting idea! I love stories from Chuck's point of view, I think he's a very interesting character, and you wrote him absolutely great.
Bill, as kind of Chuck's best friend, was such a great and cute idea. Zachariah was such a sick guy, I'm glad Chuck got rid of him. Really, poor Bill.
I liked the developement of Dean and Castiel's relationship here, the description of small details, and Chuck's ensueing difficulty to convey the atmosphere.
The mention of the "pronoun trouble" was great, I must admit I ofter wonder what to write instead of "he" and "his" a dozen times. But as Chuck mentioned it, some other expressions just don't fit.
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Date: 2009-07-14 10:12 pm (UTC)Bill, as kind of Chuck's best friend, was such a great and cute idea. Zachariah was such a sick guy, I'm glad Chuck got rid of him. Really, poor Bill.
I liked the developement of Dean and Castiel's relationship here, the description of small details, and Chuck's ensueing difficulty to convey the atmosphere.
The mention of the "pronoun trouble" was great, I must admit I ofter wonder what to write instead of "he" and "his" a dozen times. But as Chuck mentioned it, some other expressions just don't fit.