I love their despair and total inability to control anything - it leads to the only possible conclusion. I'm relieved that you gave it an open ending and didn't let them just starve, because I was completely prepared for the worst.
The sex has an edge to it that's only there in those totally hopeless situations, too. But you manage to give it more meaning through this: “Still,” it sounds like he says, “why now?” But McKay’s too smart to have asked a question like that, and John’s not dumb enough to answer.
That just made me shiver. But my favorite sentence in the whole thing, maybe because it is something so ordinary and shows the utter absurdity of their situation, is this one: Rodney’s waiting for him when he gets back: sitting in the living room, on the couch, staring at the silent TV.
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Date: 2005-09-15 10:24 pm (UTC)I love their despair and total inability to control anything - it leads to the only possible conclusion. I'm relieved that you gave it an open ending and didn't let them just starve, because I was completely prepared for the worst.
The sex has an edge to it that's only there in those totally hopeless situations, too. But you manage to give it more meaning through this:
“Still,” it sounds like he says, “why now?” But McKay’s too smart to have asked a question like that, and John’s not dumb enough to answer.
That just made me shiver. But my favorite sentence in the whole thing, maybe because it is something so ordinary and shows the utter absurdity of their situation, is this one:
Rodney’s waiting for him when he gets back: sitting in the living room, on the couch, staring at the silent TV.
Great stuff. Thanks!