Quick! Beta help?

[trinityofone]

This morning I had a last-minute crisis of faith about my undermistletoe story; I didn't like--didn't quite believe--the version I had written, so I, uh, re-wrote it. I have to post it in a couple of hours; would anybody be willing to quickly look over both versions of the story and tell me whether or not I'm being crazy? I'd really appreciate it.

Also, can somebody tell me: according to Sheppard's "official" bio, was his father supposed to be a general or a colonel?

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[smittywing.livejournal.com]

According to the bio on scifi.com, his father was a "respected Cold War colonel" though they don't specify which branch of the military. (I don't know if I imagined or if they changed it, but I thought that at one time it said "famous" Cold War colonel and I went around asking people if they actually remembered any colonels from the Cold War and...most people didn't remember the Cold War so it sort of failed as an experiment.)

[trinityofone.livejournal.com]

Thanks; I don't know why I couldn't find that. And "respected" is such an oddly ambiguous word--implying that doubt may have been cast, and is subsequently being corrected. Or at least, it does if you over-analyze things like I tend to do...